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作者: s002352006 時間: 2016-5-24 12:03 AM 標題: 英文寫作高手!!幫幫忙

我寫的 The dream was started. There was a child who keeps running. His face like a anime characters and his hair like a gold shining the air. I thought maybe it can light a whole world. Someone was chasing him. Maybe he stole something from this man. This child really enjoyed this situation. Keep running in the market and jumping on the basket. One by one. just like an active movie. His body condition was good never feeling tired. His laughing resounded the whole noise market.
住國外表哥幫我改的 Then here the dream started. There was a child who kept running. His face looked like an anime character, and his hair was like gold shining in the air. I thought it probably could light up the whole world. Someone was chasing him. Maybe he stole something from this man. This child seemed to really enjoy his difficult situation and kept running in the crowded market and jumping between baskets. It was all just like an action movie. He remained energetic and never felt tired. His laughter could still be clearly heard in the noisy market.
他幫我修得很多，我不知道怎麼增進我的寫作能力，我能看得懂他寫的，可是自己寫的時後就是寫不出來，不知道什麼時後要加，比如第一句Then here ，我自己寫得時後會覺得那樣可以(我個人用GRAMMARLY寫的)誰可以教我。
1.像你們寫的文章的時後，都是怎麼思考的方式?
2.你們一開始句子都架構，都是怎麼開始的?
3.如何寫出正確又豐富漂亮的句子架構?
4.我看完他修的，我感覺我寫的真的很爛。如果覺得我寫得很爛嗎?
5.給我一些suggestion ETC. ((<---像這樣我都不知道是ETC先還是SUGGESTION))

我真的很迷茫，沒自信
救救我!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!PLEASE

作者: pop00123 時間: 2016-5-24 01:38 PM

本帖最後由 pop00123 於 2016-5-24 01:39 PM 編輯

>比如第一句Then here

第一句開頭可以不要 here

1.像你們寫的文章的時後，都是怎麼思考的方式?

與你的思考方式沒有不同, 只是文法是否熟練的問題.你的中文文法熟練, 寫文章要表達就比較順,
所以你的英文文法熟練程度, 就直接影響你寫文章的表達.
不熟練的時候, 中文思考習慣就常常牽制了英文思考.
使你不自覺把英文句子用中文的排列方式寫出來.

怎麼辦?
老套, 多聽多讀多用, 多聽多讀多用, 再多聽多讀多用
沒有停止的一天. 就像你用中文一樣

2.你們一開始句子都架構，都是怎麼開始的?

不要想架構, 你想說什麼就說什麼.
多用熟練, 自然有架構.
反過來, 若未先落實文法熟練, 哪來架構? 那是會把你框在裡面的架構.
都用特定架構寫出來文章不是變得沒有特色? 誰寫都一樣了.

先有文法基礎, 才能有文章架構.

3.如何寫出正確又豐富漂亮的句子架構?

同上.
熟練基礎文法 + 持續多聽多讀多用
唯一道路

4.我看完他修的，我感覺我寫的真的很爛。如果覺得我寫得很爛嗎?

他以前也很爛的.
有誰一開始學就是好的?

5.給我一些suggestion ETC. ((<---像這樣我都不知道是ETC先還是SUGGESTION))

捨棄想要快點學好.
這不可能快.
把英文充滿自己的生活, 用英文找資料...
自然就會進步

只管持續多聽多讀多用英文
其他想法都捨棄.
你成功只是早晚.

作者: s002352006 時間: 2016-5-24 11:27 PM

pop00123 發表於 2016-5-24 01:38 PM
>比如第一句Then here

第一句開頭可以不要 here

謝謝你這麼認真回答我，你可以分享你一開始寫得時候都遇到什麼問題，怎麼克服嗎？

作者: pop00123 時間: 2016-5-25 12:06 AM

s002352006 發表於 2016-5-24 11:27 PM
謝謝你這麼認真回答我，你可以分享你一開始寫得時候都遇到什麼問題，怎麼克服嗎？ ...

一開始就是心裡所想的沒辦法順利表達,
因為對很多句型用法沒有熟練.
隨著多聽多讀不斷吸收句型就變得越來越容易表達.
只要持續不斷就能克服.
沒有什麼「特別」的方法.
再特別,沒有持續都不可能成功.

想持續, 不可以靠補習, 不可以靠考試, 不可以靠老師或靠別人, 不可以把英文當成科目來學.
想持續, 要用英文去提昇自己的既有專長與興趣(如音樂,烹飪,科學...), 要把英文直接用出來.

全力營造自己的全英文日常習慣.
一天裡, 用中文比英文多, 進步就難.
一天裡, 用英文比中文多, 進步就快.

然後臉皮要厚.要多問.
不怕犯錯, 不怕被笑
這是真的本錢.

作者: s002352006 時間: 2016-5-25 01:42 PM

pop00123 發表於 2016-5-25 12:06 AM
一開始就是心裡所想的沒辦法順利表達,
因為對很多句型用法沒有熟練.
隨著多聽多讀不斷吸收句型就變得越 ...

thank you for your advices, i'm really appreciated for that i will follow your advices and keep going.
If you have a free time, Could we keep the conversation? thanks a lot

作者: s002352006 時間: 2016-5-30 08:13 AM

HI~ Do you remember me? How's it going recently? ^^ i'm trying to connect to you ? if you received the message and feedback to me. This is must be my lucky day.

作者: s002352006 時間: 2016-5-30 08:17 AM

s002352006 發表於 2016-5-25 01:42 PM
thank you for your advices, i'm really appreciated for that i will follow your advices and keep go ...

HI~ Do you remember me? How's it going recently? ^^ i'm trying to connect to you ? if you received the message and feedback to me. This is must be my lucky day. Thank you for your patients.

if there is something woring for my sentence. Could you to tell me and to teach me. i will learn a lot.

作者: s002352006 時間: 2016-5-30 08:17 AM

s002352006 發表於 2016-5-25 01:42 PM
thank you for your advices, i'm really appreciated for that i will follow your advices and keep go ...

if there is something wrong for my sentence. Could you to tell me and to teach me. i will learn a lot. THX again.

作者: s002352006 時間: 2016-5-31 07:49 PM

s002352006 發表於 2016-5-30 08:17 AM
if there is something wrong for my sentence. Could you to tell me and to teach me. i will learn a ...

Recently I got one job opportunity. But i need to be a intern first to improve myself abilities for seven days. So i'm nervous. I can't sure. I have had enough abilities to get this formal job opportunity.

Thank you for your feedback. You are so nice.^^

作者: s002352006 時間: 2016-5-31 07:53 PM

本帖最後由 s002352006 於 2016-5-31 08:46 PM 編輯

pop00123 發表於 2016-5-25 12:06 AM
一開始就是心裡所想的沒辦法順利表達,
因為對很多句型用法沒有熟練.
隨著多聽多讀不斷吸收句型就變得越 ...

Recently I got one job opportunity. But i need to be a intern first to prove abilities of myself for seven days. So i'm nervous. I can't sure. I have had enough abilities to get this formal job opportunity.

Thank you for your feedback. You are so nice.^^

i don't have enough limits of authority to use 點評 and leave the message in your personal space. I'm not sure. You can get my message or not.

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